Cause/Effect 7-4
March 14, 2000
Jennifer Spillman
ndebt2u@prodigy.net
I think the show Friends in [is, not in] popular because most people would like to have the
characters['] lives. To have friends you can count on to always be there for
you would be a goal for me. I would think most people would want this as
well. If everyone in the real world got along like the cast of Friends I
think everyone would be happier. This show seems to make a lot of people
laugh. Laughter is an important part of life and better mental health.
Brittany Majzun
bmajzun00@hotmail.com
The topic I have chosen concerns some reason why relationships break up.
The main reason is lying. People lie to afford fights which is an effect [awkward
syntax--you mean the fights are an effect of their lying, or lying is an effect
of their desire to avoid of fights].
My boyfriend lied to me about going over to a friend[']s house after he left my
house on[e] night, [new
sentence] he did this to afford [avoid] a fight so he says. This is very upsetting
[insert a comma] and I really don't understand it at all. A[n]other reason is cheating. People
cheat because they need or think they need more. So this is an affect
[effect]. All
relationships have problems and I guess people find the need to cheat. [what's
the significance of these ideas to the main idea of breaking up? are lying
and cheating irreconcilable in a relationship?]
Kristen Siesennop
ksiesennop00@hotmail.com
The topic I have chosen was some causes or effects of stress. Some causes
of stress may be your work enviorment [environment], someone you work with, or too much going
on in your life. Some stress at your work enviroment [environment]
maybe [may have to do with
working] having to work overtime on a consistant [consistent]
basis when your [you are] salaried,
[have] unrealistic
deadlines, or [have] a demanding boss. Stess
[Stress] may be from a fellow employee. Like
['You might,' not 'like'] not
being able to get along with someone because of personnal [personal]
conflicts, or [you might love, not loving] loving
your job and the people you work with and hating [hate,
not hating] your boss. Some people many [may,
not many] stess [stress] because they work two jobs, have a family, and
[have] no money. Some people
stress over little things while others stess [stress] over the big things, like a job
promotion or lossing [losing] a family member. People all react differently to
stess [stress], [replace
the comma with a semicolon] some handle it better than others.
Shawn Westfall
ShawnWes@webtv.net
This short paragraph is about the positives of becoming a vegetarian and the
changes that may occur .There [be more careful with
where you drop your punctuation] are many positives that can be achieved by
becoming a vegetarian such as [an] increase in energy, loss of weight, and confidence
[that] may be gained because an overall change in diet. I feel that eating vegetables
does increase the capability of learning new things and the capacity to store
things in long-term memory. The vegetables act as in [an,
not in] aid in developing
confidence in learning. These foods provide nutrients and vitamins to the brain
and other parts of the nervous system.Another, [ditto
with the punctuation--two spaces after a period] way that becoming a vegetarian
affects your lifestyle in a positive way [is] through the loss of additional weight
that may occur. I feel that becoming a vegetarian also provides the urge to
excersise [exercise] to achieve a satisfied look and feel. Excersise
[exercise] with the proper diet
may also increase your self-worth and improve your outlook on life.These [see
the period?] are all
aspects that are positive in choosing to become a vegetarian. In conclusion,
becoming a vegetarian ...? [it got chopped in
sending--send the tail end of it and I'll repost it]
mac
markmcmanus00@hotmail.com
the [capitalize] reason that americans [capitalize]
dont [no contractions] vote is that they believe that voting is a waste
of their time, much like this class [and yet you come
week after week--imagine that]. another [capitalize]
reason people dont [no contractions--if
you're going to use them, you need to use apostrophes] vote is
that they believe that their vote will not matter. In that they dont [no
contractions] vote
because they belive [believe] in one of these reasons or another.
[awkward syntax, reword--aren't there other reasons
besides these?]
kris askins
kaskins00@hotmail.com
Friends is a popular tv show because it causes people to laugh with funny story
lines and actors that work so well together. People can find different things to
like about this show,like a female could watch for the cute guys while the
fellas watch the ladies [insert a comma] and everybody laughs. This causes many couples who
cannot usually find a show to watch together to for once have a tv show in
common. The effect is less fighting over the tv station. [good]
Chrissy Spooner
Ckspooner@aol.com
Exercising is very benificial [beneficial] to the body. Any type of cardio
exercising will make a person feel more awake while one [he
or she, not one] is doing it and right
after. It also helps a person fall sleep. For example; [use
a comma, not a semicolon] when I get off work
I am usually tired, but I didn't [haven't, not didn't] do[ne] any physical[ly] strunuating
[strenuous?] activity. I used to
think I was too tired to move, but when I started woeking [working]
out I would actually
wake up. I also found I wouldn't lie in bed at night wondering why I could
not sleep. When I work out I sleep awesome. The feeling of warm muscles after a
hot shower is a wonderful feeling to me.
connie thomas
cfthomas00@hotmail.com
Some effects of stress can lead to problems with your appetite, [your]
sleep, and your
health. Stress can increase or decrease the appetite, [new
sentence] you may not be able
to sleep or you might always feel fatigued. Cardiac problems can also
occur. It is important that you learn how to manage stress. Stress management
class[es] are offered at area hospitals while others find escape through exercise. [other
classes find escape, or other people do? reword this sentence]
Erik Statler
estatler00@hotmail.com
There are ways an employer can get the most out of his employees. One of the
most important ways to do this is the treatment. The managments [management's]
job is to make
the buisness [business] as profitable as possible; this means motivating his or her
employees to do the best they can. The employees should be happy with thier [their]
job[s]
and enjoy what they are doing. If managment [management]
can keep its employees happy then
they can achive [achieve] respect for themselves and receive more productive results. This
is important for the success of the buisness
[business] and its employees.
Nick Slape
nslape00@hotmail.com
The topic I chose is why a particular sport is so popular. I think that hockey
is such a popular sport because it is a really fast pace[d], physical, and very
exciting sport to watch and play. There are so many hockey players that hockey
fans look up to and maybe even dream about being like; [replace
the semicolon with a comma] such as, [lose
the comma] Wayne Gretskey [Gretsky?],
and other all-star hockey players. When the Stanley Cup play-offs come around [insert
a comma] hockey games become alot [a lot is
two words] more exciting to watch, because the teams step up
their play and all of the players step up and play much harder than they did in
the regular season, and it is just really exciting watching the teams battling
tooth and nail in their drive to win the Stanley Cup. [this
second clause is redundant with the first]
maureen baker
moeb29@hotmail.com
There are many people who find writing difficult. Many different things
can cause this, such as a poor education. Spelling and grammer [grammar]
skills are
important to have to help write correctly. These skills are necessary when
an author wants to create an item for the reader to understand and be able to
follow. But I also believe writing can be difficult for other reasons.
Some people like myself find it hard to express their thoughts in the written
word. I can think up the greatest stories or arguments for my opinion [insert
a comma] but
I have too many thoughts to sort out. I also find [that]
as I begin to write my
thoughts I feel as though I am losing all the great ideas I wanted to record
because my focus changes when I look at what I have written and I can not [cannot
is one word] write
fast enough [that's the importance of drafting]. All of these things can be very frustrating to any individual who
may find themselves [pronoun/antecedent
disagreement--individual/themselves] in a situation where it is necessary to write.
Malkiat kooner
mkooner00@hotmail.com
The teenagers drink because they do not know what is the affect [effect]
of alcohol.
Some of them drinks [drink] that [because,
not that] they goes [associate
with] in the bad company.Some [put
two spaces after every period] of them drinks [drink]
for
enjoyment . But I cannot say that every teenager drinks. That is not the age of
drinking ,because [lose the comma] drinking is not a good habit.Some
[two spaces after the period] of them drinks
[drink] that [because,
not that] they do [have, not do] not reach[ed] at their
['the,' not 'at their'] point where they want to go .
Robbin Koker
o2feelwell@aol.com
Reasons why relationships break up are numerous, and they are sometimes
complicated. One reason maybe [may be is two
words here] that the communication between the couple
can not [cannot is one word here] become parallel, meaning on the same level. Two people reach a
point in a relationship that [in which, not that] issues occur which
[that, not which] can not [cannot
is one word here] be resolved; in fact,
each person has such strong convictions about the concerning issue [issue
concerned, not concerning issue] that no
matter what the out come [outcome] would be he or she will not give in to the other
person[']s views. This could be the result from direct past experiences, or
he/she has observed a circumstance and collected his opion [opinion?]
from it. The
out come [outcome] is always sadden[ed] by not viewing the issue of the love for each other;
instead, they think with a narrow mind and lack the ability to compromise.
arthur frentzel
afrentzel00@hotmail.com
The effects of not following the golden rule or in other words the absence of
not [the lack of] treating others with respect are extremely necessary to be implicated
[word choice...called, perhaps] to
teach offensive ignorants to change thier [their] behavior. To live a life
adjacent to chivalry [isn't chivalry a good thing,
though?] by every nuance and crevice of its meaning is to destroy
the body that we have been given by God. When one shows anger to another
he or she sends that anger into hummanity [humanity] and it comes right back before the
offense has a chance to speak. We as humans were born with a soul and
higher self, [new sentence] the higher self is not implicated into our being until after we
master our spiritual emotional and physical needs. Emotional needs are
treating others as ourselves and putting the highest power first which is
connected to our higher self. The higher self knows how we treat others and
attempts to tell us what[']s up. This is applied by reaping what we
sew [sow].
Putting on a load that should awaken in us to the connection of the Holy Spirit
which is where the presence of God enable ...? This
got chopped. You can send the rest of it if you like.