Pollution: Our Responsibility
Jim Williams

Pollution is a problem which everyone in the world must deal with and accept responsibility for all damage being done to our planet.  Everyday we destroy just a little bit more of our resources.  We are able to accomplish this with hazardous waste, air pollution, water pollution, the destruction of natural resources, and acid rain.

Well over half of the world is covered by water.  This water contains life, valuable life which is important to our ecosystem.  Yet, we spill, dump, and contaminate these waters everyday.  Oil spills can destroy hundreds of miles of shore lines.  It can kill millions of animals, plants, and trillions of gallons of water.  Making it unsuitable to support life.  The Mississippi River is an excellent example of water being polluted.  It starts out from a pure source.  Naturally melting snow, rainfall, and springs.  However, by the time the river reaches a place such as New Orleans, it is so polluted that one can not even purify it enough to drink the water.  Chemicals, sewage, acid rain, and many others all pollute the water.

Acid rain - just what the name implies.  All rain has acid in it.  However, the label acid rain comes from the fact that the rain contains airborne pollutants and much higher amounts of acid than what should be in it.  Acid rain has a range of effects on the world.  There are things such as a car dealer having to have the cars washed after each rain fall all the way to historical monuments being destroyed.  Other examples are waters such as lakes become so acidic that it can no longer support life.   Forested land is not immune from its effects either.  The soil's acid level becomes so high that plants can not survive.

Hazardous waste is a big part of our pollution problem.  These days just about everything is in some way or another connected to hazardous waste.  The paint we use on our homes, stains on the decks, chemicals to kill pests, to the gas and oil we use in our cars.  When we are done using these types of products we cannot just throw them away.  We have to dispose of them in a
responsible manor.  Examples of this is storing them safely and taking them to the collection sites in the area.  These people will take them and find new life for some, like recycled paint or recycled oil.

Air Pollution is a becoming a large problem.  In California there is just a heavy fog all day long because of air pollution.  Smog is directly related to causing terrible problems with people. It seems that the elderly, and the one's with asthma have a hard time breathing.  Air pollution is effecting the world.  In parts of South America where there is still rain forest left effects can be seen.  In smaller cities such as St. Louis the meteorologists inform the viewers what the air quality is going to be for the next day.  All of these is contributed to the internal combustion engine and big factories that flood the air with pollution. 

Cars are one of the greatest and worst inventions.  For obvious reasons they are great, but they are one of the worst because they have terrible after effects on the environment.  The engine uses gasoline to operate.  This substance is made from oil.  Oil by itself can cause a catastrophe if it is mishandled.  After the oil is refined into gasoline and burned in an engine it leaves behind air toxins.  When the gasoline evaporates it leaves a vapor, in that vapor is small amounts of these air toxins.  This small amount from one car adds up fast when one considers the fact that most families have two cars and there is a countless number of people in the world today.

The ozone is an important part of our being here.  Without it we could not survive.  This ozone was being destroyed by chemicals such as Chlorine, Fluorine, and Carbon better known as CFC's.  These chemicals are almost completely indestructible, meaning they are hard to break up into individual atoms.  Two of the most common places to find CFC's were in spray cans (e.g., spray paint, most chemicals which used compressed gas to release the contents).  The second most common place to find it was in air conditioners (e.g., whole house, room, vehicle, refrigerators, and freezers).  Over time with use of these chemicals caused a hole in the ozone.  When this was discovered to be the source of the problem the chemicals were eventual removed from use after lawmakers saw how bad the problem was.  We now have new products out to replace the systems and cans which used CFC's before the problem got out of control. 

Water, air, acid rain, hazardous waste, and the destruction of the ozone are all ways the earth is being destroyed by us.  The ozone such have been a wake up call to lawmakers, industries, and us as individuals.  However, it is was not until it was almost to late to fix the problem before anything was done about the ozone.  We should stop these other pollution's before they become problems which cannot be fixed.

Introduction

Develop this intro along the lines of man's struggle against pollution. Give me a brief background on when and how pollution first became perceived as a problem for us. Then, rework that thesis so that it isn't subordinant to its associated ideas. You want to make a strong point that you can prove, or argue. As this is a position paper, you'll want to tell me where you think we ought to be and how you think we should go about getting there.

Body_1

Give me an example of an oil spill and the measures taken to clean it up. Careful of fragments. What causes pollution in the Mississippi? Strengthen the transition between that river and the oil spills in the ocean. Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea of water pollution on the thesis. How does this idea help you prove that thesis?

Body_2

Give me a transition out of your previous paragraph and into this one. When did these airborne pollutants begin to be a significant problem? Develop some of the reaction we've had against this problem. Bring closure--never end on a subpoint--how is this idea of acid rain important to the thesis?

Body_3

Explain what hazardous wastes do to the environment. Things like gas evaporate into the air, but those other things you call wastes, like paint and stains, are things we purposely apply to walls and outside furniture. How can we be more responsible in their application? The only thing you've mentioned that is actually thrown away is old oil, and we've already got guidelines on oil disposal. Are not enough people who change their own oil disposing of it properly? Bring closure--why is this idea important to the thesis?

Body_4

You might switch this paragraph with the one previous to it because your transition out of acid rain might be more clearly drawn than a transition out of hazardous waste. You need to strengthen all of your transitions, both the internal and the external ones. How is air quality determined? What measures can be taken to ensure better air quality? Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea to the thesis.

Body_5

Give me a transition out of the paragraph concerning hazardous wastes. If cars are so bad, why do we continue to use them? Are there alternatives in the making? The number of people in the world isn't exactly countless. There's 6 billion. Do all 6 billion have cars? Which country is most responsible for auto manufacturing? Is it a problem one country can fix through greater legislation? greater invention? How so? bring closure to this idea by telling me its significance to the thesis.

Body_6

What have the CFC's been replaced with? How rigid are the controls on their recovery to keep them from being dumped back into the atmosphere? How is this idea important to the thesis?

Conclusion

Open this paragraph by reintroducing the thesis, not by summarizing all of your associated ideas. Strengthen the impact this issue of pollution has had on our society. Bring closure by telling me why the thesis is important.