Pollution
Brett Thompson

Today's society is more educated than ever before.  Yet the horror of the whole thing is, that the people who are educated about thing's today, are not educated for the things of tommorrow.  In todays world, there are thousands of things that are slowly but surely deteriorating or precios mother earth.  It really does not effect us, but our children.  Today we have global warming,  water pollution, illegal dumping, and so much more.  Is there an end, or can we make it an end?

There are numerous causes of acid rain, several of these accumulate into severe cases. In some cases, acid rain is caused when industrial fumes mix with moisture in the atmosphere. Acids are then carried in clouds for long distances before they are deposited through rain, which indicates that forests and lakes far away from factories may be damaged by acid rain. Another reason causes acid rain is automobile exhaust. Research has shown that although industrial emission makes up for most causes, sulfur dioxide from oil and coal combustion and nitrogen oxides produced from automobile engines have intensified the problem, and the ever growing population of drivers is not helping the problem at all.

Acid rain, a type of air pollution is formed when sulfur and oxides and nitrogen combine with atmospheric moisture form acid rain.  This pollution may also take the form of snow, fog, or a dry form of precipitation.  The problem is far more than what one thinks.  In recent studies, blame of this pollution, is being placed on widespread environmental damage, including eroding structures, injuring crops and forests, and is threatening life in freshwater lakes.

Electric power plants are also to blame for this issue. Recent study has shown that power plants are accountable for the release of more than 20 million tons of sulfur Per. 3 dioxide each year. Meaning that 10 years from now, there would be around 30 million tons of acid rain components in our atmosphere (Webster encyclopedia).  And the fight to keep these large corporations are not enough to slow the release of sulfur in to the atmosphere.

The effects of acid rain can also be seen in lakes, rivers, and streams and plant growth. Acid in water kills practically all life forms. By the early '90s, tens of thousands of lakes had been destroyed by acid rain.  In the pictures below, you can see the effects this has had on fish.  This is a growing trend for lakes, rivers, and streams.  Bottom line, the acid levels are getting to high for wildlife to strive.  Scientist are not only worried about the well being of wildlife but, they are becoming more concerned of how this is going to start to effect humans.

Scientist are taking a closer look on the effects acid rain might have on humans.  In recent studies, scientists have concluded that acid rain, is starting to intencify, and that it is starting to contaminate our fresh water (our drinking water), and that is has become such a problem, in some areas, it is very harsh to even breath.

At the beginning of the 20th century most rivers/lakes had not yet begun to die. However by 1926 local inspectors were noticing that many of the lakes were beginning to show signs of death. Fish were found dead along the banks of many rivers. As the winters ice began to melt off more and more, hundreds upon hundreds more dead fish (trout in most cases) were being found. As the scientists continued to work they found many piles of dead fish, up to 5000 in one pile, further up the river.  In the live specimens were examined they were found to have very little sodium in their blood. This is a typical result of acid poisoning. The acid had entered the gills of the fish and poisoned them so that they were unable to extract salt from the water to maintain their bodies sodium levels.  However until recently the loses of fish was contained to the southern parts of Europe. Because of the constant acid rain, lakes and rivers began to lose their ability to counter act their affects. Much of the alkaline elements; such as calcium and limestone; in the soil had been washed away. It is these lakes that we must be worried about for they will soon become extinct.

By the late 1970s many scientists began to suspect that it was not only the acid in the water that was causing the deaths. They had proved that most fish could survive in a stream that had up to a 1 unit difference in pH (Webster’s Encyclopedia).  After many experiments and research they found that their missing link was aluminum.  Aluminum is one of the most common metals on earth. It is stored in a combined form with other elements in the earth. In the end, society needs to take a look from the outside in, instead of the in side out, Because as a result we have species dying daily and we have growing problems with drinking water due to the high acididty.  Will it take people dying to get a reaction to this ever growing problem.  Acid rain is a bigger problem than most think, and needs to be looked at a little closer.

REVISION

Acid rain, a type of air pollution is formed when sulfur and oxides and nitrogen combine with atmospheric moisture form acid rain. This pollution may also take the form of snow, fog, or a dry form of precipitation. The problem is far more than what one thinks. In recent studies, blame of this pollution, is being placed on widespread environmental damage, including eroding structures, injuring crops and forests, and is threatening life in freshwater lakes.

There are numerous causes of acid rain, several of these accumulate into severe cases. In some cases, acid rain is caused when industrial fumes mix with moisture in the atmosphere. Acids are then carried in clouds for long distances before they are deposited through rain, which indicates that forests and lakes far away from factories may be damaged by acid rain. Another reason causes acid rain is automobile exhaust. Research has shown that although industrial emission makes up for most causes, sulfur dioxide from oil and coal combustion and nitrogen oxides produced from automobile engines have intensified the problem, and the ever growing population of drivers is not helping the problem at all.

Electric power plants are also to blame for this issue. Recent study has shown that power plants are accountable for the release of more than 20 million tons of sulfur Per. 3 dioxide each year. Meaning that 10 years from now, there would be around 30 million tons of acid rain components in our atmosphere (Webster encyclopedia). And the fight to keep these large corporations are not enough to slow the release of sulfur in to the atmosphere.

The effects of acid rain can also be seen in lakes, rivers, and streams and plant growth. Acid in water kills practically all life forms. By the early '90s, tens of thousands of lakes had been destroyed by acid rain. In the pictures below, you can see the effects this has had on fish. This is a growing trend for lakes, rivers, and streams. Bottom line, the acid levels are getting to high for wildlife to strive. Scientist are not only worried about the well being of wildlife but, they are becoming more concerned of how this is going to start to effect humans.  Scientist are taking a closer look on the effects acid rain might have on humans. In recent studies, scientists have concluded that acid rain, is starting to intencify, and that it is starting to contaminate our fresh water (our drinking water), and that is has become such a problem, in some areas, it is very harsh to even breath.

At the beginning of the 20th century most rivers/lakes had not yet begun to die. However by 1926 local inspectors were noticing that many of the lakes were beginning to show signs of death. Fish were found dead along the banks of many rivers. As the winters ice began to melt off more and more, hundreds upon hundreds more dead fish (trout in most cases) were being found. As the scientists continued to work they found many piles of dead fish, up to 5000 in one pile, further up the river. In the live specimens were examined they were found to have very little sodium in their blood. This is a typical result of acid poisoning. The acid had entered the gills of the fish and poisoned them so that they were unable to extract salt from the water to maintain their bodies sodium levels. However until recently the loses of fish was contained to the southern parts of Europe. Because of the constant acid rain, lakes and rivers began to lose their ability to counter act their affects. Much of the alkaline elements; such as ...?

By the late 1970s many scientists began to suspect that it was not only the acid in the water that was causing the deaths. They had proved that most fish could survive in a stream that had up to a 1 unit difference in pH (Webster's Encyclopedia).  However until recently, the loses of fish was contained to the southern parts of Europe. Because of the constant acid rain, lakes and rivers began to lose their ability to counter act their affects. Much of the alkaline elements; such as calcium and limestone; in the soil had been washed away. It is these lakes that we must be worried about for they will soon become extinct.

After many experiments and research they found that their missing link was aluminum. Aluminum is one of the most common metals on earth. It is stored in a combined form with other elements in the earth.  So when it rains, and there is a high amount of acid in the rain, there is a chemicle reaction, which is what is causing the high amount of deathes among fish.

In the end, society needs to take a look from the outside in, instead of the in side out, Because as a result we have species dying daily and we have growing problems with drinking water due to the high acididty. Will it take people dying to get a reaction to this ever growing problem. Acid rain is a bigger problem than most think, and needs to be looked at a little closer.

Introduction

Misspelled words: things, tomorrow, today's, our, precious, and affect.

Don't list all of your associated ideas in your intro. Develop the background a little here with a brief history of man's culpability as polluter. In what way does it not affect us? When my dad was in college, he was told that his children would be severely affected by global pollution. Well, that's me. And you're younger. So, what of that? Clarify your thesis. What is it you want to argue or discuss? Your thesis is never a question, but a strong, central statement that your body paragraphs can support.

Your revision of this paragraph is slightly better. Why did you send me the revision before receiving my comments on your original? This third project wasn't the one you were supposed to revise, though. I still need revisions on your first and second paper.

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Give me an example of a region that's been affected by acid rain derived from the pollutants of another region. Is it too many cars on the road that exacerbates the issue, or is it lack of regulation of auto manufacturers who should be forced to clean up their emissions? Bring closure to this idea by telling me it's important to the thesis.

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To which recent studies are you referring here? You deleted this paragraph in your revision.

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Again, which recent studies. What does this prediction of 30 millions tons of acid rain components in our atmosphere in the next decade mean? Analyze any quote you take from anywhere.

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You haven't cited any of your sources.

Conclusion

Never conclude a paper with "this needs to be looked at more closely." Bring closure by telling me why your thesis is important.