Pollution
Andrea Weiss

Polution is having a major effect on our envierement.  We have destroyed many of our water sources,  by dumping waste, trash, and harmfull chemicles into our rivers.  The air we breath is being taken away from us by the polution being produced by factorys located all over the world.  Cars let of a toxic fume that is also a large part of the pollution.  UV raise are stronger than ever, because our ozone is being ripted apart from a the chemicles being released into the air.  This is the reason that there are so many natural disasters hapening accross the intire world. 

Water is one thing that people can't live with out.  Water covers much of our planet.  With out water all living things would die.  So, why are we polluting are water sorces?  People have been dumping wastes into our waters for some time now.  If some one where to subadiving in the Mississippi river there  is no telling what they might fined.  They would probly see stuph like cars, empty cans,  trash bags, and so much more.  There are also harmfull chemicles being realest into are water sorces.  This is killing many of the aminals and plants that live in these waters.  It is also making it dangerous for us to bath or drank the water.  This mean that they have to filter all of the water before we can use it. 

"Acidic deposition, or acid rain as it is commonly known, occurs when emissions of sulfur dioxide (SO2)and oxides of nitrogen (NOx)react in the >atmosphere with water, oxygen, and oxidants to form various acidic compounds."  This information is located on the web http://www.environmental-expert.com/articles/article154/article154.htm. Acid rain falls to the earth in a wet form, such as rain,snow and fog. acid rain is damaging to lakes, streams, and is also harmful to high elevated trees and plant life.  It can move through the soil leaving chemicals in the ground that makes it harder for the plants to grow and some times even impossible.  Also when acid rain inters into lakes and streams, leaving the same chemicals that is killing of the water life.

Automobiles also let off harmful chemicals into the air.  Both nitrogenoxide and hydrocarbon are chemicals that come from cars.  Its the burning of the gas and oils that is let out through the exhaust pipe and then released into the air.  This is one of the most damaging pollutions to the ozone.  These chemical are also harmful to humans, causing different kinds of breathing problems.

The ozone layer is make up of three oxygen atoms that are linked together. "Ozone in the upper atmosphere (the "ozone layer")occurs naturally and protects life on earth by filtering out ultraviolet radiation from the sun."  This information is located on the web, http://www.epa.gov/otaq/o4-ozone.htm.  The damage that is being dome to the ozone is causing a wide spread of damages to the crops and forest.  It is also a significant cause of skin cancer, which can end up being fatal.

Smog is becoming a major problem in some states.  When the ozone is at round level it is a noxious pollutant it creates a thick cloud that covers the sky called smog.  This is responsible for severe irritants.  It can cause choking, coughing, and stinging eyes.  Smog can destroy lung
>tissue, can also make people major susceptible to infection in the lungs. Smog is covering more and more of the earths surface and is continuing to get worse.

Forest fires are also a major cause of pollution hear on earth.  Forest fires are often set intentionally by man kind to empty out a large portion of land quickly, to turn it into farm land.  Fires can also be caused by nature, such a lightning.  Forest fires will destroy anything that gets in it way including the ozone layer.  It lets of a thick cloud of black smoke that if it gets in some ones lungs it can kill them.

Pollution is very dangerous to the survival of this planet.  People all over the world have recognized this situation we have on our hands.  Though, we continue to keep polluting.  We have recently discovered how bad it  the pollution really is.  Therefor, we have started the clean air act, to keep the pollution down to a minimum.  Hopefully, by this movement we will not destroy this wonderful planet we live on.

Introduction

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This background would be better written by giving me a history of how it is that we've come to pollute our environment--if you want to prove that it's pollution that causing natural disasters like El Nino and La Nina, for instance, then you should show me in this intro how that pollution has become a global problem.

Body_1

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They have to filter all the water we drink anyway, Andrea--most of what we drink is recycled waste water from the water treatment plant. Who is it exactly who is responsible for all this dumping? Are they holding themselves accountable for their actions? Develop this along those
lines.

Body_2

Never begin a sentence with a quote. Quotes are evidence, which means they have to have something to support. Give me your own idea, and then give me a quote to follow it up. Follow all quotes with why you think that quote is important to the idea it supports. Develop the origins of
acid rain here. Where does it come from? Who's responsible for it.

Body_3

Here, you switch from environmental problems, water and air, to their causes. To maintain uniformity, all your associated ideas should be of the same type. If your paper is going to talk about effects, be consistent, and insert into those paragraphs about effects the various causes that
might be at play here. Likewise, if your paper deals entirely with causes, i.e. cars, industry, etc., stay consistent and have all of the examples be causes, integrating into each of those examples various effects. But don't have a couple of paragraphs on cause and a couple on effect. It throws your paper off balance.

Body_4

This is good. We're back to effects--develop your ideas on this. Don't get lazy and say, "Hey, check out the website." That's not an effective use of your paragraph. Develop this along the lines of what ozone damage means to us.

Body_5

How related to the ozone is smog? You want to avoid making this a subpoint of the previous associated idea. If that's the case, include it inside the paragraph on the ozone. Each of these body paragraphs should be independent of one another enough to be able to stand alone as complete thoughts that each support the thesis.

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How much of a pollutant is fire smoke? Develop this idea along those lines.

Conclusion

Develop this idea of the Clean Air Act. In what sense is this the impact that pollution has on our society? Have we been making stronger efforts in the past decade or so to ensure the better quality of our environment? In what sense?