In the year 2004 [insert a comma] many projects will have been completed to improve the life For St. louisans [capitalize], one of them being the reduced amount of pollution in the air.  The people of St. Louis were scared of making more strict laws on the output of pollution into are [our, not are] atmosphere because they were afraid that the big Business [lower case--for example, who would have moved out?] would move out and know [no] new corporations would not [double negative-delete 'not'] move back in. Now the [danger concerning] health issues on polluted air outweigh[s] the [dangers of a possible] loss of corporation[corporate enterprise] in the area. We are presently trying to lift a ban on a cleaner burning fuel for are [our] cars so that we have less output of pollutants from are [our] cars [if it's so good, why is there a ban in the first place?].   We are also going to be stricter on state inspections and the amount of emissions cars can put out. All of these plans are going to be used to make the air We [lower case] breathe in St. Louis healthier for us. St. Louis will be going through a huge renovation in the next couple of years, dealing with many problems [be specific--focus on the issue of clear air], [insert a coordinating conjunction] every one should try to help make it a better place to live.

Reformulated gasoline will now be available to the citizens of St. Louis due to the new renovation of 2004.   Reformulated gasoline is a gasoline that burns cleaner than conventional gasoline.  [is this the stuff you mentioned in the intro?  is there still a ban on it?]  It does not decrease the performance of your [lose the second person] car engine, but increases [but it does increase] the gas mileage. [does that mean that it's necessarily more efficient?] Reformulated Gasoline [lower case] will not evaporate as fast as regular gas; therefore [insert a comma, and an 'it'] will decrease The  [lower case] amount of hydrocarbons released into the atmosphere. If you [lose the second person] drive out of town where there is no reformulated gas, you [lose the second person] can put regular gas in your [lose the second person] tank and it will not hurt your [lose the second person] car to mix the two. [how does this changeover compare to the earlier changeover we had from leaded to unleaded gasoline?  will the transition be smoother?]  The new gas will not hurt  cars[insert an apostrophe] performance, durability, or fuel system, [replace the comma with a semicolon] in fact [insert a comma] many car Manufactures [lower case-spelling] support its use. Reformulated gasoline is a big step to the cleaning up of St. Louis's [lose the s after the apostrophe] smog problem in the summer months; therefore helping the people that [who, not that] are affected by the pollutant health wise.



In accordance with the revitalization of St. Louis 2004 [insert a comma] Missouri has set up a new way to inspect the emissions that come out of cars. In the past[insert a comma] people would bring their cars to a shop and their [there] they [who? the shop attendants or the people themselves?] would inspect cars for safety and emissions. This nedded [spelling] to change because people would find way[s] to have their cars pass even though they were puting [spelling] out bad polutants [as opposed to good pollutants?  spelling] into the air. This happened all the time, [run-on] I know because I worked at a shop. [give me an example--illustrate one thing that was done to cheat the test] In the future [insert a comma] cars will be inspected for emissions at government runned [spelling] agencies. [how are they going to pull that off?  right now, most shops will give inspections--people have lots of places to go so there's not that huge a backlog--if the government were to do it at a fraction of those locations, the waiting line would be tremendous] Cars will be tested for their emission[s performance] at different speeds on a dynamometer. A dynamometer is a machine; cars are put on those enables the simulation of real driving conditions, [awkward clause--'A dynamometer is a machine on which cars are put to simulate...'] and also measures the amount of carbon monoxide, Hydrocarbons, and nitrogen oxides that are emitted at different speeds. This new system will get a lot of cars of [spelling] the road that put out bad emissions that use to pass every year illegally. [won't this deprive a lot of lower income people from having access to automobiles?]

St. Louis has been recorded as a very high air pollutant zone by the Environmental Protection Agency, because of the high amount of lower ozone
polutants[spelling, finish the thought, 'pollutants in the area'] . Lower ozone pollutants are polutants[spelling] that come from car, factories, and recreational vehicles and say[spelling] in the lower atmosphere. This level of polutants [spelling] are [subject/verb agreement--level/are] high on hot summer days when their[spelling] is little are [spelling] no wind. A big part of the problem comes from factories as well as cars. The problem with putting strict regulations on factories is the loss of jobs in the area, where[while, not where] putting regulation[s on] car emissions is less costly to a single individual. [that's just it, though--it shifts the cost from the corporations who can afford the bill to the citizens who cannot--is there anything being done by the car manufacturers to ensure the their products will meet emissions regulations over the long term?] The city of St. Louis had to make a decision, regulate factories and risk the loss of job[s] and also the loss of new industry, or keep the same regulations that they have today and risk the health of the citizens of St. Louis. They made the decision to put new [and] harder regulations on factories and help keep the air we breathe safer for a change, and the 2004 project. [taking this on the end doesn't really flow well--do you mean to say they were impelled by the 2004 project to begin to effect change?  what will be the consequences of this particular law to the industrial atmosphere of St. Louis?   why is a reduction in the lower ozone pollutants important to the thesis?]

Another way of getting clean air is to get rid of almost all the polutants [spelling] coming out of cars. In a few more years new cars will blow little are[spelling] no emmissions[spelling]. [how is that possible?  what effect will this have on the cost of those vehicles?  on the cost of gasoline?] This is bigger than the St. Louis 2004 project, [run-on] this is a nation wide project that the EPA and auto makers have been working hard at for a while now. [are there any automobile manufacturers in St. Louis that this will affect?] Right now car[s] put hardly any polutants [spelling]out into the air, [run-on] you [lose the second person] can put a car in a garage with the doors closed, and kill your self [lose the second person] any more. Just the other day [insert a comma] I was looking at an emissions print[insert a hyphen]out on a new lincoln [capitalize] and it only put out 1.5% hydrocarbons. [how's that compare with other cars?] I see a future with lots of clean air to breathe thanks to the step taken by the people involved in projects like 2004. [how long do you think it will be until all these other cars are retired?  how long did it take all the cars that used leaded gasoline to be retired?]

Mass transportation will be the key to cleaning the air in St. Louis for the 2004 project.    We're [lose the contraction] slowly building more and more metro link [is this capitalized and one word?   what's the website for the Metrolink?] lines in the outlining [outlying, not outlining] areas of St. Louis.  One program we have now is that on red air quality days you [lose the second person] can ride the metro link [spelling?] for free.  The metro link  [spelling?] is a light rail system that runs off of electricity and is much more efficient than buses and cabs. In [By?] 2004  [insert a comma] people will be able to use the Metro link  [spelling?] outside of the city [insert a comma]  which will be much easier [than what?].  If I could use Metro link [spelling?]  to get to school and back I would jump on it. [why?  aren't most Americans in love with their cars?] Since the Metro link [spelling?]  is ran [run] off of electricity [insert a comma]  it puts out zero pollutants into the air [insert a comma]  therefore getting rid of a lot of pollutants otherwise put out by unnecessary cars.  This new rail system extending into the suburbs will cost a lot at first  [insert a comma] but [reword--it will compensate for its initial costs in...] will also save a lot of money in long run and clean the air.

The rumor is that for the [lose 'the'] St. Louis 2004, we are trying to ban the use of 2 [insert a hyphen--spell out two] cycle engines in recreational vehicles like outboard motors for boats, [and engines in] motorcycles and dirtbikes, lawnmowers, chainsaws, weedeaters, and engines in [lose 'engines in'] wave runners. These engines are small in size compared to the amount of horse power they produce. A two [insert a hyphen] cycle engine uses two cycles too [spelling] produce power which is much more efficent [spelling] than a four [insert a hyphen] cycle engine which uses four cycles to produce the same amount of power. [what's a cycle do?] The problem with a two [insert a hyphen] cycle engine is that it run[s] at an extremely high rpm, [run-on]  this is good for things like boats, motorcycles, chainsaws, and so on, but these engines tend to were [spelling] out much faster. These engines also have to use special gasoline that is mixed with extra oil for lubrication at high speeds. This gas oil mix when burnt creates a very smokey [spelling] exhaust that is high in polutants[spelling]. When I am sitting on the dock at the lake I can tell a big difference in the smell of a waverunner passing by or a big cruiser, [as] the waverrunner always smells like unburnt gasoline and oil mix. [bring closure--what would be the importance of this ban to the thesis?]

After the year 2004 there will be many changes in St. Louis. The revitalization of St. Louis will take time and a lot of money to complete, but in the end it will be worth the effort put forth by everyone. Even though clean air is part of the St. Louis project [insert a comma] I think it is more of a state [insert a hyphen] wide project that concerns every city in Missouri. Most of the laws passed to reduce the amount of emissions were passed by the state legislator[spelling]. We [insert a comma] as the citizens of Missouri [insert a comma]should take part in the cleaning of the air we breathe, [run-on] it depends on our health and the health of are[spelling] loved ones. [develop this paragraph a little more concerning the impact of this issue on St. Louis area--how are all these changes going to affect the way we view our lives and responsibilities in St. Louis?]