St. Louis, [lose the comma] 2004 is going to open the door for a new and better city to work, and play in. [in which the citizens may more gainfully work and play, you mean] St. Louis is currently undergoing alot [a lot is two words] of renovations[insert a period] I know it doesn't look like it now, but like other cities they[who?  other cities or St. Louis?] to[too?] are undergoing change as well to get ready for the future. This great city has had a lot to offer[run-on] it was originally established in 1764, and [it] was said to be a trading post along with a small town. This was the place to come for many traders and explorers, [run-on]this town was known for it's [its, not it's] trading and outfitting [redundant--lose this clause]. This little town was eventually named after Louis lX of France, hence the name St. Louis. This town has had some rough spots,[run-on] for instance we have had problems with decline in population, and with that brought a decline in the quality of the city, [run-on]but a few years latter [spelling--later than what?  when?] the good people of St. Louis pitched in and really cleaned up the city through a neighborhood renovation project. As always St. Louis has been a very historical place to live, [run-on]we have the Arch "Gateway to the West", [run-on]as well we are the proud fans of the St. Louis Cardinals, Rams, and[insert a comma] my favorite[insert a comma] the Blues. I've [lose the contraction] noticed in the past years of my life that the city has many run down buildings, and not just[any] buildings, but historical buildings.[that would make sense, insomuch as modern buildings usually are not run down] I am reminded of all the times my dad has told me stories about old buildings and what was once their [there, not their]. It is a shame of the severity [of what?   the shambles?  awkward syntax]of thies [eh?] buildings in shambles. I have always been fascinated by the stories I was told, and now [I have] the chance to write about them [run-on] what a great honor. Downtown will come alive again in the not so distance [distant, not distance] future in the year 2004. The first step to cleaning up the city and it's[its, not it's] surroundings is 'Downtown Revitalization." [this is a really nice intro, Jason--good work--just clean up all those run-on sentences, use periods, conjunctions or semicolons to link them]



In a city where their [there, not their] are thousands of people, you [lose the second person] have to have the resources to keep a city in tip top shape. When I see a run[use a hyphen here]down building I start to think of all the possibilities and what we as citizens could do to make that building a better place. Take [lose the imperative] for instance the old hospital in the heart of downtown [run-on] this is a huge building taking up a lot of space,[run-on] if we could divert some of our tax paying [lose 'paying'] money towards great buildings like this one we would slowly create a better city in which to live in.[lose this second preposition]  I am not bad mouthing anyone [run-on] but when I look at some of those historical buildings being run down, it makes me sad that maybe one day they won't [lose the contraction] be their[there, not their] [for me] to show and tell my kids about them. Quality in the city starts with the community, [run-on] if we give them nothing to be happy about[insert a comma] we will not get the great city back to it's [its, not it's] original form. I like to look at all the buildings and think of what they once were. I still believe that St. Louis is the greatest city in which to enjoy all it has to offer. History is a major aspect in the future [run-on] as we move forward it only moves backwards[insert a comma] and if we let all of this cities [city's] history slip away [insert a comma] are we really a quality city where people want to live, work, and play.[rephrase into a statement, answer the question, don't ask it--'then we are not really a quality city where...'] What makes the city great to me quality my friend quality.[delete, irrelevant--the previous sentence is sufficient closure]

The affects [effects] of downtown revitalization is [are] unmesurable[immeasurable]. When a person restores[insert a comma] or takes[insert a comma] for that matter, an important or a historical place and changes it or fixes it [insert a comma] [it] tends to bring different emotions into play. For instance [who?] when they blew up the arena, I was not a happy person. I had seen my first of many hockey games in that building,[run-on] the whole time it was falling to the ground all I could think of was,[replace the comma with a 'that']  all the people wanted it to stay, but just because a few didn't[lose the contraction, insert a comma] it had to be destroyed and made into a parking lot. In that case[insert a comma] the affects [effects] where [were, not where] not positive at all. This happens all the time [run-on] everyone feels differently about a situation [insert commas before coordinating conjunctions] so the outcome cannot be measured. Now [insert a comma] when it comes to cleaning up the city [insert a comma] everyone is eager to see the outcome [insert a comma] and this will have many positive affects [effects] on everybody in and around St. Louis. One [effect] could be a nicer and happier community. Another aspect [lose aspect]  is that St. Louis could become a desirable place to live. The possibilities are endless. I would love to see a cleaned[insert a hyphen]up part of St. Louis and how the affects [effects] have shaped other communities around them to do the same. I bet nine times out of ten [lose the cliche] that you [lose the second person] could get a chain reaction going and before you [lose the second person] know it your [lose the second person] city is revitalized with life and people.  

In the year 2004, community life will change drastically in the aspect [aspect?  clarify--this may not be the word you're looking for] of life. Life is going to change in ways that we have never experienced before. Community to me is [comprised of] the people that [who, not 'that']surround you [lose the second person] in a particular environment. They are the people that [who, not that] share similar ideas and thoughts on how to make the city, suburb, or neighborhood in which you [lose the second person] live in a better place in the future. Community shapes the city you live in.[in which one lives, you mean]  They are the real reason your [lose the second person] city or neighborhood is such a great place to live. Now if you [lose the second person] throw downtown revitalization into the mix, you [lose the second person] will get a tremendous effort to improve as well as the support in making once that[what, not that]  was dead, revived and full of life again. This is what community is all about; [lose the semicolon, use a colon or a comma] support. Support will make any situation ten times better in the outcome. When dealing with downtown revitalization [insert a comma] support will determine the outcome in that particular project or area. Community determines what is important to them to revitalize. They are the ones, after it is all said and done, who keeps [subject/verb disagreement--they/keeps] that effort going, [run-on] after all they believe in it. Isn't [lose the contraction] that what it's [lose the contraction] all about, believing in something with a chance to change life in every aspect.[change this question into a statement--"That is what it is..."]

"Goals and Targets" are what downtown revitalization is all about. Of course, this revitalization plan will have many goals and targets, great and small. The targets are the buildings that are falling down or some part of the city that is run down. [link these two clauses together somehow--the sentence on the right is a fragment] For example, some old apartment complex that is run down to shambles, [run-on] now the goal is to make that building come to life with people. Goals are never an aspect too large, that[which, not that]   is why there are targets associated with the goals. In order to take that goal and break it down, is to accomplish a target. [awkward syntax, reword this entire sentence]  Target areas include everywhere in downtown that could stand a little clean-up project of it's [its, not it's] own. That comes into play[what does?  awkward syntax--clarify] , while talking about how to access buildings or fairgrounds, either being a goal or a target. Let's [lose the contraction] take the arch for example,[run-on]  the arch was a goal,[run-on]  the area that surrounded the arch, [lose the comma] was a target. Either it be the buildings or the riverfront.[fragment--develop this idea of the difference between goals and targets along the lines of your example of the arch--in what way do the goal and the target develop a relationship with one another?]  Without goals or targets, you [lose the second person] do not have a good bases [basis, not bases] for change, and that's [lose the contraction] the name of the game[again, another cliche] , change.

Another aspect to revitalization, [lose the comma] is the ever-so important hard work aspect that is put into the revitalization process of the city. A person is said to be, [or is] able to be, measured by their [pronoun/antecedent disagreement--a person/their] hard work. Some might disagree, [lose the comma] with this statement, but others will believe this to be true. From that sentence comes the idea of hard work and believing [and a belief, not believing] in something worthwhile. Let's[lose the contraction and the imperative] face it, a downtown revitalization project will take alot [a lot is two words] of time, blood, sweat, and tears. This will never be an easy project, [run-on] if you [lose the second person] talk about man hours alone, it would be astronomical for the four years,[lose the comma] it is going to take the city of St.Louis to rebuild and restore. I feel that when everyone pitches in, it will be a lot smoother of a ride in the aspect of time and money. In order to have a successful project, you [lose the second person] have to invest money and hope the upside is great. This always creates a promise that the people have to keep on a reasonable level. This hard work ethic has become a bit scarce in the city today. People feel that what good is it, for we have done it once, so why again do it. [now there's a really awkward sentence, reword it completely...turn it into a statement that makes sense] The reason is in order to develop a new life and spirit for your city[clarify--this is a fragment--you might combine this sentence with the previous one in about half the words]. When hard work gets the job done, a certain emotion engulfs you [lose the second person], and that is proudness. [pride, not proudness]

Memories are always present in life,  [run-on] it's   [lose the contraction] what our lives are shaped by, so it is only fitting that  [the concept of] memories is a topic to discuss in a paper about "Downtown Revitalization". People over the years have been collecting many memories and at the same time, passing them down for other memeories. [spelling--passing them down for other memories?   that's awkward, clarify] I think this is what shapes a city. Memories are good old memories. [slightly redundant--reword] Everyone sho [who] lives in the city is bound to have great memories of what the city used to be. Along those same lines, those memories will help with the revitialization project. I mean that through the cities  [city's] people, and memories, one should bring this city back to how it used to be. [through the memories of the city's people, you mean] I have many wonderful memories of the city and how spectacular it used to be. It is still a great city. Don't  [lose the contraction] get me wrong, but some of the buildings could use a little help. I know that the city of St. Louis has been a very historical place,  [run-on] over the years it has been developing. I hope my children will be able to have the same memories I once had as a child in the big city.  [clarify--you want them to have the same memories, or do you want them to be able to have memories that equal yours in happiness?] Most people would want to remember the city as old fashion[ed], the way it used to be. You  [lose the second person] could say that the revitalization in the city is the ability to get the people involved  [insert a comma] and also their memories will shape the "Downtown Revitialization" process. [this paragraph is semi-sweet--that means that you've got a lot of feeling in here but very little substance--strengthen the point you're trying to make by avoiding redundancy and stating how the memories of the older generations will help maintain and preserve the structural integrity of the city those generations remember--are they the ones restoring old buildings from photographs or their personal youthful experiences?   develop a tad]

Throughout my time writting  [spelling] this paper, I have discovered many different things, from  [replace ', from' with 'concerning'] how St. Louis affects me,  [lose the comma] and my thinking of the city. I feel everyone is affected by the city and whow  [spelling] we work and play within it. Downtown Revitalization impacts everyone in the city. This can affect us  [in] either  [a] good  [way] or  [a] bad [way], which is the citizens call. How they perceive the changes is how the changes will affect us as people of the city.  [fragment] The city of St. Louis means alot  [a lot is two words] to me and others,  [run-on] it is ours in a sense. With me saying that we don't  [lose the contraction] want big things,  [lose the comma] that take away from our great city [fragment, what about it?]. I hope with the revitalization process, they  [who?] do it in moderation and style,  [run-on] after all, they [who?] are trying to impress us in a way. The impacts are never going to be measured,  [lose the comma] because the impact will be around the year 2004, and with all the different people and reactions, the impact will be inmeasureable [spelling]. I will gladly accept this change for a better city. All I hope is that the people will welcome the new change. Lastly, I hope for quality, not quanity.  [spelling] That is what I think about the impact of "Downtown Revitalization" on the city of St. Louis.  [irrelevant closure--tell me why the idea is important for St. Louis--something like, "The quality of our downtown's revitalization...(is important because?)]