Global Warming
Patrick Amann
Good intro, but how can we be certain these increases are not part of a natural progression in the earth's biosphere? After all, the earth has been around billions of years if the scientists are right, and we've only had the technology to study the biosphere on a global scale for about fifty years. Is it really possible that on a planet the size of ours we could have caused so much damage in less than a century of automobile manufacture?
Nice explanation of how that process works. How dangerous is this increased greenhouse effect to us? What are the potential dangers of it as far as our ice caps are concerned? Could their melting cause worldwide flooding?
Why is it that plants have little ability to adapt? Haven't they been adapting for billions of years? Are we moving too fast in our planetary destruction for them to keep up? Discuss that. Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea to the thesis.
Won't much of the aquatic life adapt to the changes in its environment? For those that don't, won't large multinational organizations discover a way to continue breeding these fish in controlled indoor environments? What is the ultimate result in a situation, though, in which one species falls extinct and breaks the food chain? Will this break continue to escalate beyond sea birds? Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea to the thesis.
Develop this idea less speculatively by introducing something larger than a regional phenomenon like what happened in Chicago (if you wanted to continue to focus on isolated events that have national significance you could start with the flood of '93 in St. Louis, or the tornados of '99 in Oklahoma), like the El Nino and La Nina fronts that have blown across the U.S. these past two years. Could events like that turn cataclysmic? Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea to the thesis.
Ah! We're back to cars--you lost them in the discussion of other aspects of global warming--if your thesis deals with them, though, you have to incorporate them into every paragraph. Is it really possible to stop global warming at this late point in our development? If these alternative energy sources are so great, why do we still have fossil fuel based sources?
Develop this idea of how the individual can help resolve this problem by acting individually? How much will the efforts of one person help?
Strengthen this closure with a greater emphasis on the impact of this issue on society--how is society responding to it? You've already mentioned how research and development is trying to catch up to new and alternative methods of fuel production, but how much is the government assisting in the effort?