Teen
Pregnancy
Nicole Hrin
Nice intro--this is solid information--where did you get your facts, though? You should cite your source, or create a hyperlink to it. Concerning the issue of teen pregnancy, are these numbers for unmarried teens exclusively, or do they include women who marry at 18 and are pregnant at 19? You also need to give this paper some direction--give me a thesis statement that tells me what you want to do in this paper. The more specific your thesis the better your paper will be in drawing associated ideas to discuss it.
Strengthen that intro sentence to say that pregnancy has a strong effect on a teen whether good or bad. Focus in this paragraph on those options you feel are left the teen and develop each option in context with its importance to the future of the teen(s). Concerning the child's receiving love from both parents, do you mean it would be the ideal situation if both parents got married--the assumption being that they weren't married before the pregnancy occurred? Good concluding sentence.
Does the NCPTP have a website? If so, create a hyperlink. Develop the idea behind those disagreements that this campaign has tried to ease--what disagreements have there been? Specifically what does this campaign do in providing a national presence? Does it enter high schools and sponsor teen workshops? Does it provide funding for troubled teenage girls to work in maternity wards as candy striper assistants so that they can get a glimpse of what maternity would be like? Does it focus on condom distribution and the education of teenage males about the hazards of premature sexual activity? Be specific. Bring closure by telling me how this campaign is significant in proving your thesis.
Does this Council have a website? If so, create a hyperlink. Discuss these four goals in terms of their concrete reality--what services are specifically provided to pregnant and parenting teens, for instance. Wouldn't their endorsement of support groups of pregnant teens take away the social stigma of having a child out of wedlock and encourage further sexual behavior? Does attaching a social stigma to teen pregnancy serve as a deterrent, or does it just make the pregnant girl feel even worse about herself? In that case, should the girl be comforted? Is it all about the girl? What role does this Council play in confronting adolescent players who are impregnating these girls? Bring closure by telling me the significance of this council to your thesis.
Open this paragraph by introducing the idea of how pregnant teens should be treated--as humans rather than as monstrosities who have destroyed their parents home and made a mockery of all the values their parents ever taught them. Then move into ensuring they receive all the physical care of an adult woman, with all the additional psychological and emotional care of a confused teen. Develop this paragraph along those lines and your transitions won't seem as choppy. Bring closure by telling me the significance of this idea of positive and encouraging treatment to the thesis--by treating the pregnant teen with the same respect as one would treat a pregnant adult, is it possible that the wrong message is being sent to the teen that it is okay to get pregnant out of wedlock. Instead of taking a shotgun to the young man who impregnated the girl, how is it possible for the family of the girl to welcome that adolescent into their home as part of their family? Would marriage be expected of the two immediately? What if neither want to marry? Should that be a consideration? Finally, in today's society, many teens have grown up in matriarchal families where their parental role model is their mother and they have had no stable father figures in their lives. If this is all they know, then how are they to be blamed when they repeat the mistakes of their mothers?
Develop this idea alongside the types of prenatal care teens can have that will prevent them from developing problems such as these. Obviously, once a girl starts menstruating, she's reached sexual maturity--in the earlier days of our nation, girls were married off as early as 14--as late as three generations ago, girls were married right out of high school at 17 or 18. It has only been in recent years that women have started to wait longer before they have children, to give themselves time to finish college, start a career, etc. How then is it possible for teens to experience worse complications than a woman in her 20s if teens are physically capable of becoming mothers. You mentioned in the previous paragraph that teens were physically identical to adults in terms of pregnancy--what distinctions are being drawn in this paragraph.
A sex education program would be a great idea, but when and where would you implement it? On the middle school level? the high school level? And in what way would it be implemented? By a lecture? a video? the distribution of condoms to all the girls in gym class and instructions on how to place them on a penis? would not hands on direct action like this make the girls more confident about having sex rather than deter them from that possibility? How do you balance disemination of information with keeping up a healthy sense of mystery and fear?
You mean, they plan to wait until they are older and married to have their next child. Are teenage pregnancy rates decreasing due to the rise in free abortion clinics that will perform abortions without parental knowledge or consent, or is this decrease due instead to greater awareness about the potential of a teen's sexuality?