Legalizing Marijuana
Michael Sanders
Develop this intro along the lines of how the government treats people who deal in marijuana--focus on the numbers of people presently in the courts or jails for marijuana related offenses. How far has the government gone to try to totally eradicate this drug? What types of movements have there been to help bring it back, especially since the drug culture of the '60s popularized it? Popular magazines like HighTimes have done their part, too--develop the role played by them. What of the recent move by Minnesota Governor Jesse Ventura to legalize the return of industrial hemp farms in his state? Is this an opening for the return of marijuana production in this country? Finally, what exactly is your thesis here? A strong thesis will give this paper a strong direction and focus.
Why Mary Jane, though? What's significant about that name? Hemp, though, has been around since the founding of the country. George Washington advised that we should protect hemp production and pursue it as one of our most important crops. How closely related is marijuana to hemp? How widely used was it before 1937? Did it become a threat during Prohibition as it sought to replace alcohol? Develop this along those lines.
Your first and third sentence are redundant with one another--consolidate them into one sentence in half the words. Develop this idea, however, on biomass fuels, as it's a good one. What keeps the U.S. from importing this from large hemp producing countries like Canada, etc.? Are there other plants with which this fuel can be made?
Clarify this point--does marijuana cure those diseases, or merely relieve pain and serve as an apetite stimulant? Develop this paragraph along the lines of the effect marijuana has on treating these illnesses.
Here you list additional diseases not covered in the above paragraph. You might move those diseases up to Body 4 and focus there on the effects on physical ailments, and develop this paragraph here on the effects of this drug on psychological ailments. Develop it along the lines that it is a non-addictive substance that actually calms and lifts the spirit and makes the mind more susceptible to therapy treatment.
Put this long quote in long quote form and cite your source on it--never conclude a paragraph with a quote, as quotes are nothing more than evidence and therefore need to be interpreted and analyzed after they're used. Bring closure to the paragraph by telling me how this controversy is important to the thesis.
There is no body 6 posted here. Thanks for sending it--it needs development. No one is arguing that the law should be repealed after it is granted. Clarify what you mean by that.
Develop this conclusion by telling me the impact this issue is having on society--how is the controversy over marijuana legalization affecting the American public and the governments need to respond to the growing concerns of its constituency?