Forest Fires
Jeff Davis
Begin this paragraph by introducing the concept of forest fires by definition--what constitutes a forest fire and in what way is it detrimental to the forest--especially considering your claim that they are beneficial to the forests? If there was a time that forest fires were beneficial to the forest, why aren't they still? What has the introduction of humans done to change the way forest fires operate? You might develop this introduction by giving me background information concerning mankind's war on forest fires--take the Smokey the Bear program, for instance. Strengthen your thesis by telling me exactly what you intend to prove in this paper--ought we to take measures to better understand them or embark on a massive public awareness campaign to try to prevent them? A strong thesis will set you up for a strong paper.
This is a really interesting point--how is this detrimental to the forest if your earlier assertion that fires were beneficial to the plants and wildlife by clearing away the debris is true? Won't it rain eventually? Bring closure to this paragraph by telling me the significance of this lack of rainfall to the thesis.
Do you have web addresses for the BCFS and the ESA? If so, create hyperlinks. This sounds like a remarkable system--it works in real time?--meaning that the fire fighters are wearing headsets and can track other outbreaks of the fire after they've put out the initial ones? Develop this idea along the lines of how effective it actually is--how often has it been used? with what degree of success? How soon can this system identify a fire before people on the ground even know it's there? What's the date of this invention?
Develop this idea along the lines of preventive measures being taken to ensure that people don't accidentally leave behind a smoldering fire in our nation's forests. What sort of guidelines are they given upon entering national parks? How many people actually have homes within the forests? It seems like the danger to them is relative to the danger people who live in Oklahoma face concerning tornados--likely occurences but rarely destructive of their own homes. Is this just a risk these people are willing to take? like we in St. Louis are willing to take the risk of floods or earthquakes which don't happen enough to scare us? To which word should that hyperlink be attached?
Do you have a website address on the IFMP? Why is the year 2000 important to these people? How is it possible to get ahead on an endless fight? Do they not hope that someday there won't be a reason to fight--that early prevention methods will nip fires in the bud before they get started? Where is this 10 million DM going to be applied? Just in Germany, or throughout the forests within both Germany and Indonesia? What is the German interest so many thousands of miles away from its borders? Develop this idea on how exactly this Project plans to minimize the impact of wildfires and exercise the most environmental care?
Being this paragraph by introducing the idea of smoke jumpers--with whom are they affiliated? local fire agencies, or national fire alert teams? If they have to jump into a hard to reach area to fight this fire, how is it that they are any help to those who are going to have to travel hours to get there? By then, it really will be too late. Develop this idea along those lines. Where do you want that hyperlink?
How are you going to find wet clothing on a bed of rocks if water is not around? Develop this paragraph by losing the second person references and focusing on training methods given to campers. Are there special safety training programs to help campers avoid death in case of a forest fire? How will crouching in a clear area or in water save you from falling tree branches? What else can be done to prevent death on this count?
Strengthen your development of the impact of this issue on society. If it's such a serious problem, why aren't there greater awareness programs? Whatever happened, for instance, to Smokey the Bear? What legislation has been passed in this country to prevent forest fires from destroying our national forests? Is all we have left mere hope?