Partial Birth Abortion
Jaimee Rion
Good intro. When was the concept of partial birth abortion first labeled? When you say over 2 million a year, do you mean in America, or globally? If only 13,000 of these are performed in the entire eastern portion of our country, does that mean the majority (around 2,000,000) are performed in the West and South? Clarify what you mean by this. Also, give me some legal background on this procedure following the 1973 Roe vs. Wade decision to legalize abortion in America.
"...too many people against partial birth abortions..." you mean. Focus a little more strongly on this idea of legal ambiguity--the right to abortion-access is not ambiguously worded, so what is the rationale behind ambiguously wording partial-birth abortion statutes? It's got to be something stronger than the congressional desire to let the courts decide what they mean. If the politicians are afraid that the people will overthrow this law in a referendum, why are they making laws that go contrary to the desires of their constituency? Have there been any court cases in any of these states that condone partial birth abortion that have established a precedent for the removal of the laws supporting the procedure?
Good argument, but if that's the case, why then do doctors perform the procedure? Does it not go against their Hippocratic Oath that states first do no harm? If the fetus is screaming at the pain being inflicted, though, then it is a born creature--do you mean a silent scream while it is still inside the womb? What is the difference these doctors perceive between the born and the unborn as far as basic dignity of human rights is concerned?
The issue of "breathing" is what's at stake here. If the creature is not breathing, then it is not alive. If you're going to attack the idea of its being murder in the first degree, you have to first prove the fetus is a living, functional human--sounds ridiculous, but that's the core of the argument right now in the courts. There's a whole philosophy behind the idea that if the fetus' only means of survival is to grow at the expense of its mother, then it is classified as a parasite or a tumor. Dehumanizing it through those definitions makes it legal and moral to remove it. Argue this.
You could develop this paragraph in a more graphic fashion if you wanted. While the purpose behind this paper is not to present an exclusively emotional plea to your readership, graphic imagery can be unsettling to a reader who is herself considering an abortion near the end of her term of pregnancy.
This is a good sentiment, but highly redundant throughout the paragraph. Trim it down to about half its length and redevelopment along the lines of arguing against the fact that sometimes God makes mistakes--at least, humans make mistakes and should be allowed to rectify those mistakes on their own. If there were no need for abortion, for instance, it wouldn't exist. The fact that it exists proves that there is a need for the service. If I have a cancer tumor and can get it removed surgically, then I'm improving on God's plan for me. Likewise, if I have a child growing within my womb and can get it removed surgically, there should be no difference. Why is it permissible to undergo corrective surgery in one case, but not in another?
"...almost to the point of suicide they."--what? Develop this idea of the emotional effects--focus on the fact that while physical wounds heal, spiritual wounds take much longer to do so, if ever. You could really get into this idea. Give me examples from depression clinics, etc. How many women presently being treated for depression have an abortion in their background? Of these, how many carried that child almost to term? I imagine the longer a woman gestates, the closer her attachment is to the unborn child within her. The later she seeks 'corrective surgery', the worse it will be for her emotionally. Focus on that.
Rework this paragraph to focus on the impact this issue of Partial Birth Abortion is having on our society. You might check Vitae Society records, or look for them on the web.