Ozone Layer
Brandon Sumski

High above the earth's surface, located in the stratosphere is the ozone layer.  This is a layer of thick ozone molecules that block the sun's ultraviolet rays from reaching earth's surface.  Basically this layer keeps us alive ny protecting us from these uv rays that can cause among other things skin cancer. This is the reason that so many people are becoming concerned with all the pollutions we are poring into the atmosphere and how they are eating away and destroying the ozone layer.  They are so concerned because if the ozone layer is destroyed, just being in the sunlight could be very dangerous.  Hopefully we will be able to prevent this from happening.

Say for the moment that there is no ozone layer, what would that be like and more importantly what would that do to the environment here on Earth?  For starters there would not much life on our planet, if any at all.  It would probably be very cold and much if not all the water would have receded to the polar ice caps.  It would be much like the environment on the planet Mars.  It would be very barren and nothing would be able to live in the harsh environment.  This would happen because the ozone layer helps to hold in the heat from the sun, and if the ozone is gone much of the heat would be able to escape back to space.  In a way it acts like a greenhouse for our planet.

There are two major things that we pollute the air with that can damage the ozone layer, the main two being CFC's and carbon monoxide.  CFC stands for Cloral Floral Carbons and they are the chemicals inside aresol cans that give the it's pressure.   For the most part they are found in cans of hairspray.  Most of the companies have realized that these chemicals are a big danger and have found other ways to get pressure into the cans.  The other biggest offender is carbon monoxide, which is the gas that is emitted out of your car when it is running.  That is one reason many of the car companies are finding alternative ways to power their cars, such as electricity.   This gas goes into the atmosphere and essentially breaks up the molecules that make up the ozone layer.  As more of the ozone is destroyed the more of the sun's ultraviolet light can seep into past  the atmosphere and to the surface, which causes global warming.  So cars are very dangerous to earth, but they have become a very common sight especially here in the United States.  

The hole is caused because of all the millions of pollutants produced by the multi-million dollar corporations of the new age world who don't seem to care about human life.  I feel that this is quite a horrendous thing for people to do.  The hole is causing ultra-violate rays to seep in causing the polar ice caps to melt, cause an increase in temperatures and an increase in skin cancer among humans.  The hole is located over Antarctica and is near the size of Antarctica.  The hole would come and go with the seasons, every winter the hole would appear, and every summer it would disappear, however, this past summer the hole did not disappear.

The ozone layer is one of, if not the most important concerns of the environment today.   It is imperative that we need to find ways to stop destroying it and preserve it.   It is one of the most important pieces of the puzzle of this planet that keeps us alive.  If we were to lose that piece of the puzzle, then we would lose our lives.

There is physically no way the human race could survive without the ozone layer.   If the ozone layer didn't exist, then Earth would be uninhabitable.  The temperatures would be phenomenal!  The ozone layer also burns up useless space trash that could cause tons of damage to us.  Aside air and water, the ozone layer is the most important physical element in human life.

There are many things we can do right now that would help to slow the depletion of the ozone layer. Things such as car pooling to work or school with friends or family.   That would cut down on the amount of pollution put out by cars, not to mention it would cut down on the amount of cars on the road witch would help during rush hour.   Something else that we could do that would help a lot would be to stop using the hairspray that comes in the pressurized cans, instead get the bottles that come with the pump on the top of the bottle.  Even though many of the hairspray companies no longer use CFC's to pressurize their cans some still do.  CFC's are probable one of the worst chemicals that damage the ozone layer.

I would like to say that I find it amazing that the answer to the to the problem; the missing piece of the puzzle is right in our hands, yet we choose to ignore it and destroy ourselves by continuing to enlarge the hole.  To me it's an incredibly stupid thing which needs to cease immediately in order to preserve life for generations and generations to come, because as long as there is the cause, forever will be the problem.

Introduction

Develop this introduction a bit. When was this layer discovered? By whom? When was it first discovered that we had a problem with it? What global agencies are overseeing the development and implementation of positive solutions to that problem? Develop that thesis by integrating it into the sentence that precedes it in about half the words.

body1

Rewrite the first sentence into a statement that strengthens and advances the point you want to make throughout this paragraph. Strengthen the comparison between the earth without an ozone and Mars. Is that the only thing that creates a difference?

body2

Begin this paragraph by introducing the idea of synthetic pollutants, then go into your two examples of them. Reword the first sentence you have showing here, as it's awkwardly phrased. Chloroflourocarbons is how it's spelled. What are some of the alternatives hairspray companies and the like have come up with? Strengthen the transition between CFC's and CO. Develop this idea of carbon monoxide being the biggest offender--what are some of the controls the auto manufacturers are using to cut down on this? how about the oil refiners? Rework that last sentence--tell me why this idea of air pollution is important to the thesis.

body3

Focus exclusively in this paragraph on the hole in the ozone--the intro sentence makes it sound like you're going to write about the multi-million dollar corporations. If the hole is located over Antarctica, how does that affect us in the Northern Hemisphere? What's the significance of this hole's having remained? Has it done that in the past? Could it mean anything other than pollution? Give me some history behind this--what makes it not just a part of earth's natural evolution that we've really only been keeping global data on for the past couple of generations.

body4

Develop this paragraph alongside the concept of preventive methods and redemptive methods. We need to repair the damage we've already done and find a way to avoid further harm. How can we do that? Move the information you have in Body 6 up into this paragraph.

body5

This is redundant with Body 1...integrate the ideas you have here in with that, and come up with a new associated idea to help prove your thesis.

body6

Much of this information is redundant with Body 2--you want to focus here exclusively on what can be done. Develop that information within Body 4 since that is where you first introduce the idea that we need to do something. Find a new associated idea to use here.

Conclusion

Focus here on the impact this issue is having on our planet. Are major corporations actually putting environmental concerns ahead of their corporate interests? Is this being considered as a focal point of Congressional legislation? Bring closure by telling me why your thesis is important.

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