Evolutions of the English Language
Gary Anderson

2 1/2 pages

The English language has gone through many mergers and transitions before becoming what it is today. English, as a language, has many "ingredients" that has [subject/verb disagreement--ingredients/has should be ingredients/have] brewed for thousands of years. Even today, there are ethnic groups contributing to the English language, such as the Blacks of the inner cities. Mainly, the English language has been through three "linguistic movements," the Old English (600-1000), Middle English (1000-1400), and the Modern English (1400-present) movements. It is hard to prove the evolution of the English language before 600, but it probably originated where all the other languages did, with grunts and moans. English history officially starts around 600 AD. At this time in England there were many tribes that mainly used variations of the Celtic language. These tribes, mainly Angles, Saxons, and Jutes (Anglo-Saxons), were very primitive civilizations [in what sense?]. During this time of Old English[insert a comma] theRoman Empire was at it's [its, not it's] height of power [actually, the Western Roman Empire was at its height during the age of Augustus about 600 years before--it fell to Germanic invaders in 476 A. D. and to the Ostrogoths a couple of decades later, so by 600 A. D. it was already pretty well destroyed]. When the Anglo-Saxons encountered the Roman merchants and statesmen they adapted some of their Latin words [so, English is a Romance language and not a Germanic language?  clarify]. This is the beginning of the evolution of the English language. [identify your source on this--did the language have to wait until the Romans before it could start evolving?--give me a thesis statement, some central point you can prove using these following associated ideas]

Oddly enough, Latin did not become the primary language of the Anglo-Saxons [why is that odd?  what sort of factors went into play to force Latin upon them?]. The people of England took what they could use from the Latin language and integrated it into their Celtic [do you mean the language of the Celts was native to the Angles and Saxons, too?  clarify, weren't they Germanic speakers?] language to become Old English. After the decline of the Roman Empire, the Anglo-Saxons began to gain power as a nation. During this time [insert a comma] the English began to establish the English Language [clarify--written or spoken]. Books were being translated into English and many schools were teaching the youth of England the English language [for example--which books?  which schools?]. Therefore, it could be argued that the English language thrived with the economy of the country [that's true of any language, why is it particularly true for English in this case?]. For the next few hundred years the English language brewed in England. The people used Celtic and Latin roots in their English dialect. [start the next paragraph with this sentence--The English language was about to go through another transformation. It was a political event that sparked the move from Old English to Middle English. "The political event which facilitated these changes was the Norman Conquest" [quotes should not be used if they are redundant with the point you just made, but only if they reinforce that point with supporting information--this is the type of sentence that can be paraphrased--a sentence with a statistic or an original idea by another author would be a more likely candidate to be quoted--and then you should never end a paragraph in a quote, as quotes are generally new information and therefore do not bring closure to the idea being advanced in the paragraph] (Roberts 93). [never end a paragraph with a transition--bring closure by telling me why this idea of linguistic mix is important to the thesis]

In1066A.D. the Normans invaded England from northern France. This is where the next ingredient of the English language was thrown in, French. It was fortunate for the English that the Normans only sent statesmen and nobility to England [didn't the Norman occupying force constitute something more than statesmen and nobility?]. If there had been a major migration of Normans [insert a comma here] the English language may have been completely replaced with French [would it have been? or would there have just remained a heavier influence of the language?  if this is what you think Roberts means, do you agree or disagree with him?  analyze the quote after you reference it, even if it's an indirect quote (Roberts 93). Only certain groups used French as their first language, [replace the comma with a dash or a period] "French became the language of the court, the language of the nobility, the language of polite society, the language of literature. But it did not replace English as the language of the people"(94). [now analyze this quote in context with the idea it supports, then bring closure by telling me how that idea supports, or is significant to, the thesis]

The English language has gone through many changes throughout the centuries. The Old and Middle English stages of development have produced a new English[lose 'English' here], Modern English. Modern English started in the 1400's, around the time of Shakespeare. It may be hard for the modern man to decipher the English of Shakespearian time, but the language is generally the same. [you're making too great a leap here in your transition] Modern English is ever-changing. There are new words introduced into the English language every year. It is difficult to explain Modern English because it is happening now [shouldn't that make it easier?]. What we know as Modern English is beginning to branch off into many directions. One example of this "branching off" is Ebonics, or Black English. Ebonics is a branch of the English language that has a fairly short history [500 years is short? that's a third of the time it took the entire English language to develop according to your argument--clarify]. Many people ignore Black English and say that it is "lazy English". [put the period inside the quotes] There are also many  people, such as Dorothy Z. Seymour, that [who, not that] believe it is a language in it's self [in its own right, not in it's self--'it's self' is not an English expression--that's like saying "it is self"]. This concept is not entirely hard to believe. Remember [lose the imperative], the Anglo-Saxons adapted Celtic, Latin, and eventually French languages to create English, so the "language of Ebonics could very well be it's [its, not it's] own language. The Black, [lose the comma, it's a restrictive element] English-speaking people of today have simply substituted vowels and sounds to create their own language, as did the Anglo-Saxons. Ebonics is a good example of Modern English, [use a coordinating or adverbial conjunction here, or a semicolon] it shows that it takes one language to create another. Language is an ever-changing means of communication, [use a coordinating or adverbial conjunction here, or a semicolon] the English language is a good example of this. Our language as we know it has come to us all the way from the Anglo-Saxons nearly 1500 years ago. It is probable that even our language will be considered primitive someday. As I said, the English language, or language in [as a whole, not in whole] whole, is a stew of ideas and time [awkward syntax, rephrase] that keeps getting better [have you proven these changes are for the better?  how so?] the longer it cooks. [break this concluding paragraph into two paragraphs--all the stuff about Ebonics is new to the paper, and you can never introduce new information in a conclusion--focus in this conclusion on telling me the impact of this issue of change to society]

Evolutions of the English Language
Annotated Bibliography

Thesis Statement: The English language has gone through many mergers and transitions before becoming what it is today. [strengthen this thesis--what exactly is it that you want to prove? that English has changed?  that might be a non-argument--proving that the changes in English are politically inspired or culturally inspired might be a better angle for you--give me your annotations on each of these sources.  Who were the editors of this text?  Underline the book's title.]

1) Seymour, Dorothy Z. "Black Children, Black Speech." Language Awareness. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994: 122-128

2) Roberts, Paul. "A Brief History of English." Language Awareness. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994: 89-98

3) Crystal, David. "The Precriptive Tradition." Language Awareness. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994: 101-106

4) Naylor, Gloria. "The Meanings of a Word." Language Awareness. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994: 305-307

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Evolutions of the English Language

The English language has gone through many mergers and transitions before becoming what it is today. English, as a language, has many "ingredients" that have brewed for thousands of years. Even today, there are ethnic groups contributing to the English language, such as the Blacks of the inner cities. Mainly, the English language has been through three "linguistic movements," the Old English (600-1000), Middle English (1000-1400), and the Modern English (1400-present) movements. It is hard to prove the evolution of the English language before 600, but it probably originated where all the other languages did, with grunts and moans.

English history officially starts around 600AD. At this time in England there were many tribes that mainly used variations of the Celtic, or Germanic languages. These tribes, mainly Angles, Saxons, and Jutes (Anglo-Saxons), were very primitive civilizations. During this time of Old English, the Roman Empire was still in power. When the Anglo-Saxons encountered the Roman merchants and states men they adapted some of their Latin words. This merger was one of the first "ingredients" of the English language. Even though the Roman Empire was the dominant power at this time, Latin did not become the primary language of the Anglo-Saxons. The people of England took what they could use from the Latin language and integrated it into their Germanic language to become Old English. After the decline of the Roman Empire, the Anglo-Saxons began to gain power as a nation. During this time, the English began to establish the English Language, both written and spoken. Books were being translated into English and many schools were teaching the youth of England the English language. Therefore, it could be argued that the English language thrived with the economy of the country. The English began to spread and prosper, as did their language. For the next several hundred years the English language brewed in England.

The English language was about to go through yet another transformation; it was a political event that sparked the move from Old English to Middle English.   The political event which facilitated these changes was the Norman Conquest (Roberts 93) In 1066A.D. the Normans invaded England from northern France. This is where the next ingredient of the English language was thrown in, French. It was fortunate for the English that the Normans mainly sent statesmen and nobility to England. If there had been a major migration of Normans, the English language may have been completely replaced with French (Roberts 93). This is the second time the English language was threatened to be replaced by another language. Only certain groups used French as their first language, "French became the language of the court, the language of the nobility, the language of polite society, the language of literature. But it did not replace English as the language of the people"(94). It is probable that the English people of this time had developed strong roots of "their" language, the English language. Ultimately, instead of being a threat, the Norman Conquest proved to be a major influence on the English language.

The English language has gone through many changes throughout the centuries. The Old and Middle English stages of development have produced a new, Modern English. Modern English started in the 1400's, around the time of Shakespeare. It may be hard for the modern man to decipher the English of Shakespearian time, but the language is generally the same as today's English. Modern English is ever- changing. There are new words  introduced into the English language every year. It is difficult to explain Modern English because it is happening now; as soon as we define Modern English a new development occurs and we must re-evaluate our ideas. What we know as Modern English is beginning to branch off into many directions.

Ebonics, or Black English,  is one example of how the English language has branched off. Many people ignore Black English and say that it is "lazy English." There are also many people, such as Dorothy Z. Seymour, who believe it is a language in it's own right. This concept is not entirely hard to believe. The Anglo-Saxons adapted Germanic, Latin, and eventually French languages to create English, so the language of Ebonics could very well be it's own language. The Black, English-speaking people of today have simply substituted vowels and sounds to create their own language, as did the Anglo-Saxons. Ebonics is a good example of Modern English; it shows that it takes one language to create another.

Language is an ever-changing means of communication, the English language is a good example of this. Our language as we know it has come to us all the way from the Anglo-Saxons nearly 1500 years ago. It is probable that even our language will be considered primitive someday. The English language has overcome many transitions and threats on the way to becoming the most prominent language today.


Evolutions of the English Language
Annotated Bibliography

Thesis Statement: The English language has gone through many mergers and transitions before becoming what it is today.

     1) Seymour, Dorothy Z." Black Children, Black Speech." Language Awareness. Ed. by Paul
     Eschholz, Alfred Rosa, and Virginia Clark. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994

     2) Roberts, Paul. "A Brief History of English." Language Awareness. Ed. by Paul Eschholz,
     Alfred Rosa, and Virginia Clark. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994

     3) Crystal, David. "The Precriptive Tradition." Language Awareness. Ed. by Paul Eschholz,
     Alfred Rosa, and Virginia Clark. New York: St. Martins Press, 1994

     4) Naylor, Gloria. "The Meanings of a Word." Language Awareness. Ed. by Paul Eschholz,
     Alfred Rosa, and Virginia Clark.  New York: St. Martins Press, 1994

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